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He talked so much, as if it would never end. She was tried of his endless talks; her patience was all consumed. The ambiance made her more vulnerable. She asked him to stop blabbering. She wanted him to make some love. Passion was still missing in his eyes; speech was the only sense that he used. Romance absent, so was sexual pleasure. She asked him to sense what her heart’s words were, what messages her smile conveys. After all the real pleasure is in acceptance, in your heart’s defeat. Instead, he made her silent. And the night ended like that, in silence, forever.
A drabble written by yours truly.
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zizbiz Featured By Owner May 28, 2007   Photographer
I liked it bunches ^^
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raheel07 Featured By Owner May 28, 2007
:)
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dehog Featured By Owner May 23, 2007  Professional Interface Designer
good stuff mate...one reasons americans belive...TALK is CHEAP ! ;P
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NakedYank Featured By Owner May 23, 2007
It's so sad. But sadness has its place too.
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raheel07 Featured By Owner May 23, 2007
thanks some of the correction is worth doing. As far as suggestions are concerned I like the way it is.
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tofulabyrinth Featured By Owner May 19, 2007   Interface Designer
Overal its pretty well written :).. but the line "She asked him to stop blabbering and make some love" kinda makes it less powerful...
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raheel07 Featured By Owner May 20, 2007
Actually I wrote it this way because I wanted to show the girl's annoyance and straight forwardness.
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Celestial-SeraphiMan Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2006   Writer
This sentence doesn't make much sense.

"She asked him to sense what her heart’s words, what message underlies her smile."

Otherwise, this is a nice starting sketch for a fuller scenario.
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raheel07 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006
check it again and lemme know if its okay now.
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Celestial-SeraphiMan Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006   Writer
That's better.
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raheel07 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2006
Because I forgot to put some prepositions. Thanks for noting it out. :thanks:
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pharaohartlover Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2006
:wow:
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raheel07 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2006
:bow:
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